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The first cool drop of water
Released from the skyward mist
On an autumn afternoon
Traverses my sweaty brow
A welcome kiss of beauty

That small elegant raindrop
With fervent haste foreshadows
A wild tempest soon to come
Quenching the earth of its thirst
After long summer months

The drop rivulets across
The surface of my forehead
And I gaze into the heavens
Each subsequent water drop
Is another baptism
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tld7 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The first stanza is the strongest in my opinion and my favorite and I really like how you end the last stanza.  Beautiful poem.
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NathanielFlyingOwl Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014   Writer
Thank you very much and thank you for all the faves. :)
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tld7 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome.  I enjoyed reading your poems. :)
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KayleeRydder Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well written! i love it!
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NathanielFlyingOwl Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much. And thank you for faving it and for the watch. :)
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KayleeRydder Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome for all.
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NathanielFlyingOwl Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013   Writer
:)
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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful. :meow:
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NathanielFlyingOwl Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013   Writer
Thank you (for faving it as well). :)
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree with the previous comment.  Not only can the reader feel the raindrops, but also emotionally feel the release and freedom that sometimes (or often) comes with rain.
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NathanielFlyingOwl Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course. :3
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glunac Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013   General Artist
Suggestion:  A welcomed beauty kiss.

I love the feel of this poem, you can almost feel that cold drop on a sweaty forehead.
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NathanielFlyingOwl Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013   Writer
Thank you (for faving it as well).
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